Literature Draft 1 for Final Paper

I want to focus on the idea that socioeconomic status plays a factor into how a student may or may not affect the development and performance of student in public schools. I have posted the assignment and this is the feedback I received:

This needs to be refocused and to be rewritten.

What socio-economic factors? How is this being defined? What elements have been identified? What does the literature say that is an issue with regards to student academic achievement? and to whom and what context?

This document is too broad, vague, lacks specificity, and is disjointed. I would hope you take this serious, not rely on plagiarized sources and take time to fix this idea.

You made a number of unsubstantiated claims that have no evidence to support.

What is the central thesis statement?

I have attached my draft below as well as the instructions, rubric, example, and how to on writing a literature review. If you have any questions , reach out.

HOW- TO: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/conducting_research/writing_a_literature_review.html

NOTE: There is a total of 3-4 drafts with final paper. I will assign the same writer for each.