Essay # 3

i need your help writing my final essay for the winter semester. Some details about my essay:

i will be writing about my paradrigm i have choosen, which is electrical engineers at mt.sac (inofrmation is locted in the “online project#3 ” pdf. Here are the rubrics instructions, and it is also listed in the pdf below. Also please look through every single pdf, since my professor highlights very key, important items. Also, please go through every pdf since it will hold information on how to create the perfect essay. This essay is worth 300 points. The essay rubric pdf i have attached was for essay 1 but is valid for all 3 of my essay, the points are just adjusted. Here is th rubric

:English C1001: Essay 3

Analyzing and Critiquing a Social Paradigm

For your final essay, you will describe and analyze a particular paradigm and then form an

evaluation of that paradigm. You choose which paradigm to analyze, so long as 1.) it is a specific

social group you are at least somewhat familiar with (you belong to right now or once belonged

to it) and 2.) you get your paradigm approved by me before writing your paper. Topic approval

can happen fastest by email after you complete the exercise at the end of Introduction to Social

Paradigms.

To understand more clearly what a paradigm is, be sure to read my Introduction to Social

Paradigms lecture on Canvas. Do not just look up the word paradigm in a dictionary as a

shortcut. Read that lecture for proper context.

Your paradigm choice can be almost any group who shares a collective point of view towards a

particular field. Examples include:

a group who share the same work or profession

a particular club or organizations members

people who belong to the same sporting team

a group of people who share the same hobby or past-time activity

people who share the same major in school

any specific religious congregation or political group

a subculture of some kind

enthusiasts or fans of any kind, etc.

Be creative, but again, choose a paradigm you know firsthand (you either used to belong or you

currently belong to this paradigm).

The first lecture introducing and detailing the concept of social paradigms includes a quick,

helpful exercise to complete at home.

Email me your results to pobrien@mtsac.edu, and you can get your topic approved that way. See

details on Introduction to Social Paradigms.

Once your paradigm choice is approved, your final essay will describe and analyze that paradigm

in depth and detail. See the details of how to do this on the essay guidelines below once you’re

ready to write.

The more detailed your answers, the better. Though you will speak largely from personal

experience and observation, research is highly encouraged to fill in the gaps of your knowledge.

Your next task is to use what youve described to discuss problems or point out negative effects

of your paradigm. As a general start, ask yourself what about the paradigm seems

psychologically or socially or even physically unhealthy for its members? Present at least three

main effects, one paragraph per effect. If “negative effect” seems too harsh, think of these as

relative weaknesses within the paradigm (things that are not as good or as healthy as they could

be).

Your final draft is due THURSDAY, February 12, by 11:59 p.m. You must upload your final

draft to Canvas as either a pdf or word file. Late or missing drafts will not be accepted for credit.

Your paper is worth up to 300 points.

There is no way to revise this final paper. The final draft you turn in will be the only draft I

grade.

Since you have early advance knowledge of this question, you can technically begin writing this

paper immediately. Read the lectures on Canvas both to understand the concept of paradigms

better and to help guide your analysis.

You may email me a rough draft of your paper any time between now and Wednesday, 2/11, by

noon. Please email it to pobrien@mtsac.edu.

Guidelines for Writing a Great Final Paper

These guidelines are not going to matter to you until you sit down to write seriously. Only

consider these guidelines, then, when you start to have questions about structure or how to go

about writing this paper more specifically.

INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH:

First, explain the bare basics of what your paradigm is about to establish your topic clearly and

directly. Launch into these basics in the very first sentenceno set-up and no hook.

Next, quickly sum up how people typically view the members of this paradigm. What is the

traditional perception of the paradigm by outsiders? What is the stereotype?

Directly after that, briefly state whether that general perception or stereotype is accurate or not,

based on your upcoming analysis. This will help you pivot toward your thesis statement.

State a thesis. The thesis statement in this paper has two parts: one part to quickly summarize

your analysis of the paradigm and a second part to mention three critique pointsthat is, your

evaluation and opinion, negative in this case, of three aspects of the paradigm you are about to

analyze. This thesis will make more sense when you read the rest of these guidelines.

BODY PART 1: ANALYSIS

Your analysis is meant to break down your paradigm into specific details in order to describe it

and offer insights about its nature.

This analysis section of your paper will have MULTIPLE paragraphs.

You have considerable freedom in which specific areas of analysis to choose, so select the ones

which fit your topic and the ones for which you have sufficient information.

Again, most of the following bulleted points are optional, but pick as many as you can for a

fuller, more developed discussion.

Whenever a specific factor is absolutely required, I will put it in bold. Everything else is

encouraged but optional, depending on what fits your paradigm topic and what grade you are

hoping to achieve (C papers can cover less, A papers must cover more, etc.)

Think of each bulleted aspect below as one body paragraph of its own. Some aspects can be

combined if each goes together smoothly and if each paragraph would be too thinly developed to

stop strong on its own, but while drafting.

Organize your analytical data into paragraphs where each paragraph focuses one particular

aspect of your paradigm, aspects such as the following:

HISTORY of the paradigm: its origin, background information. History can take any one

(or more) of three forms:

DEEP history (the traditions, stretching back in time for decades or even hundreds

of years, leading to your paradigm today)

RECENT history (the trends and main developments that have influenced your

paradigm in the past ten years or less)

PERSONAL history (your own “origin story” of how you came to belong to this

paradigm, how you became an insider). Each of these separate histories can get its

own paragraph OR be combined into one larger paragraph. Personal history

should be an easy choice for everyone.

INSIDERS/ MEMBERS of the paradigm: Who are the people who belong to this

paradigm exactly? What do they tend to be like psychologically (emotionally,

intellectually, attitude, lifestyle) and in terms of their relationships (to other insiders and

also to outsiders)? Any demographic patterns? Maybe split insiders into two or three (or

four) TYPES of members, then go over them all. What does each subgroup have in

common? This is a required element of your paper; you MUST be able to describe the

insiders for at least one body paragraph.

GOALS: Both superficial (the obvious ones everyone admits to) and deep and hidden

(the less obvious ones that no one likes to talk about)

ASSUMPTIONS, EXPECTATIONS, and GENERAL THINKING within the paradigm:

What ideas do the insiders take for granted? What do they expect to happen? What other

forms of thinking or logic do you notice about this paradigm? This can be combined with

goals, if the two sets of answers overlap too much.

COMPARE and CONTRAST: Note the similarities and especially the differences

between this paradigm and any one or more related to it. The differences are more

interesting than the similarities. This is an easy element to add to your paper, and

everyone should include it.

LANGUAGE: Insider lingo, specialized terminology, words with unique meanings to

members, insider talk, anything relating to how insiders communicate and articulate

themselves within the paradigm. (Since this is an English class, I am particularly

interested in this language paragraph.)

DAY IN THE LIFE: Walk the reader through a typical day in the life of an insider. If it

is a job-related paradigm, for example, walk through a typical work shift. If it is a

music-related paradigm, walk through a music concert, for instance. Describe not just the

physical components of the experience but your emotional and psychology ones, too.

Walk through the preparation for the day, the day or experience itself, and the aftereffects.

This is also an easier element to include, and everyone should use this in their essays.

EXTREME CASES: If applicable, describe the more radical or extreme elements of your

paradigm and discuss how these extreme cases affect the moderate insiders. In my

experience, there are always extreme instances of a group, whether it be over-enthusiastic

behavior, inappropriateness, or criminal activity or scandalous incidents. For every group

who does something together, there is someone in the group who overdoes it.

Two things will make this analysis strong: details and insight.

Details include vivid descriptiveness, specific details, and most important of all, examples.

Insight means that you are including observations that are interesting and deep, ideas beyond the

obvious and superficial, ideas that reflect thoughtful and deeper observation. If an outsider can

guess what you’re saying, it is too obvious; if an outsider would be surprised to read what you are

sharing, that’s a good sign you are being insightful.

Good essays will cover at least six of the above bulleted points. But include as many as you can.

Combine related points if it makes sense to do so. It may be that I suggest a new type of analysis

paragraph for your specific topic, too, if I read a rough draft.

BODY PART 2: EVALUATION (or CRITIQUE)

The evaluation portion of your paper follows your analysis immediately with no page break or

new subheading. The evaluation starts in the paragraph right after the last paragraph of your

analysis, in other words.

Present at least three different weaknesses or negative effects of your paradigm topic on the

paradigms members. These are your opinions that you state about this paradigm. I do not want

you to discuss the “truth” or “falsehood” or the validity or absurdity of this social paradigm; I

instead want you to address the paradigms effects on its members, psychologically and socially

(such as emotional well being, stress level, personal satisfaction, quality of relationships such as

family, marriages, friendships, things like that).

Separate your evaluation points into separate paragraphs. If you have more than three

weaknesses to discuss, by all means include them. Say you have three weaknesses, as assigned,

then; that means the evaluation portion of your paper will have three body paragraphs.

Be sure to explain and support your opinion with reasons and examples. These paragraphs may

be fewer in total than those in the analysis, but this critical evaluation is key to showing me your

level of independent and critical thinking, so devote proper time and detail to your reasoning

here.

Common negative effects of paradigms to consider:

STRESS: Lots of paradigms add pressure or emotional toil to their insiders. What kind of

stress? Why is it stressful? How do insiders handle the stress? (Note that the specific

stresses of specific groups vary considerably. Be specific, be descriptive.)

STRAINED RELATIONSHIPS: Some paradigms take us away from our family and

friends. Some paradigms strain our relationships with spouses and boyfriends and

girlfriends.

ADDICTION/ COMPULSION: Sometimes a passionate insider becomes overly obsessed

or fixated on the subculture, to their own detriment.

If you mention something negative earlier in your analysis, you are allowed to come back and

discuss it further here. Just dont say the exact same thing; expand on the problem and at least

add new details and examples.

CONCLUSION PARAGRAPH:

In direct response to your negative critique points, offer proposals for reforming or correcting

those problems within the paradigm. Explain why your proposal will make the paradigm better.

Be specific, be realistic, and be constructive.

GENERAL GUIDELINES:

Your paradigm MUST be approved by me. Any paper about any paradigm that I did not

expressly approve of will receive no grade. Once your topic is posted or approved, that’s

ityou’re locked in as if I had assigned you that topic. No second guessing or changes at

the last minute. If there is still time to change your topic, though, email me and we can

discuss it.

Follow MLA guidelines for citing research, including a Works Cited page. Personal

stories and experiences require no citing, but personal interviews need to include names

and dates for the Works Cited page (if you wish to keep subjects anonymous, ask me how

to proceed).

Since your evaluation is negative, try make the ideas of your paper speak of the problem

rather than any emotionalism. Its normal to include personal experience and feelings, but

if overdone, negative passion can make the essay seem like a rant rather than an educated

opinion.

There is no minimum or maximum page length. It is likely, however, that your paper is

longer in order to include all the details and examples it needs to be strong. If your essay

is four pages or shorter, that is probably a red flag that you are not including enough

detail. Notice the math above: Introduction (1 paragraph) + Analysis (at least 6

paragraphs) + Evaluation (at least 3 paragraphs) + Conclusion (1 paragraph) = at least 11

paragraphs total. Any paper shorter than that means something is missing.

One last time, I expect to see my title formula put into effect. I will re-post the lecture

where I explain how this works, including examples.

There is no way to revise this final paper. There is no way to extend this final paper. Start

now; work steadily; pick a group you know and enjoy writing about, and this paper may

even be fun. But the longer you put it off, the harder everything will become for you.